The story got me hooked. It kind of reminds me of a game Bad Apple Wars, where they are all trapped in this "world" (because they're already dead or almost dead) Anyways... I can't wait for the next update to come out!
Great story so far! Just some suggestions, with the pronouns, make sure they aren't capitalized in the middle of the sentence. Also, make sure you are using the right pronoun, for example, instead of "him apple" it should be "his apple". But again it's a great story so far, looking forward to more!
This was so good!! This story really caught my attention, I'll definitely be thinking about this for quite a while. I can't wait to see what you do with this, well done <3
Hahah, really, one of the best? I'd say it's a shame, you deserve this and way more; the concept is so unique, not your typical "I died and nothing interesting is now happening because I am, well, dead". There are very few stories that manage to intrigue me, and yet you easily made the top 10, congratulations. ;)
Yes I’m serious!!! and oh my god you….I don’t even know what to say here!!!. I’m working hard on update and your words are like fuel for me!!! ❤️❤️❤️❤️ Thank you so much for these wonderful comments!!! I will keep your words in mind for a long time.
Phahaha, now that's very cute.~ Being serious, nothing can satisfy me more than knowing my words are enough to motivate you. If you need any help or more support, do not hesitate to ask for it- I will be more than happy to help, and I'm certain I am not the only one.
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any updates for this
is this still on-going? love it so
Im to scared to read then love it and find out this is no more 😭
I really enjoy the story so far, can't wait for an update!
The story got me hooked. It kind of reminds me of a game Bad Apple Wars, where they are all trapped in this "world" (because they're already dead or almost dead) Anyways... I can't wait for the next update to come out!
this is amazingg!! can't wait for more :D
Great story so far! Just some suggestions, with the pronouns, make sure they aren't capitalized in the middle of the sentence. Also, make sure you are using the right pronoun, for example, instead of "him apple" it should be "his apple". But again it's a great story so far, looking forward to more!
This was so good!! This story really caught my attention, I'll definitely be thinking about this for quite a while. I can't wait to see what you do with this, well done <3
awwwn thanks!!!! I’m so glad you liked it!! hopefully you won’t have to wait too long to see more :)
This is going to be interesting. So much potential, I will watch your career with great interest.
This is one of the best compliments I’ve ever received, thank you so much!!! (for some reason my first comment was not sent :(
Hahah, really, one of the best? I'd say it's a shame, you deserve this and way more; the concept is so unique, not your typical "I died and nothing interesting is now happening because I am, well, dead". There are very few stories that manage to intrigue me, and yet you easily made the top 10, congratulations. ;)
Yes I’m serious!!! and oh my god you….I don’t even know what to say here!!!. I’m working hard on update and your words are like fuel for me!!! ❤️❤️❤️❤️ Thank you so much for these wonderful comments!!! I will keep your words in mind for a long time.
Phahaha, now that's very cute.~ Being serious, nothing can satisfy me more than knowing my words are enough to motivate you. If you need any help or more support, do not hesitate to ask for it- I will be more than happy to help, and I'm certain I am not the only one.
🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩 thank you !!!!! Your help will be greatly appreciated!!!! you can contact me on my Tumblr if you want @souls-of-nothing-wip
I really love the premise of this game, it's interesting <3 Looking really good!
Thank you so much, I’m glad you liked it! :)
Tbh i cant wait for a Updates:D i'm already hooked :D
Thanks so much :)
I like it a lot so far!
Thank you :)